Thursday, May 23, 2013

hot july moon, summer of 99

twisted the warm water
out of my tangled hair
threw my head back,
and giggled at Carrie
as we danced in the spinklers
those sultry, texas nights

our tiny bikinis covered
everything,
and nothing

my insides hiccupped
but, still
I pretended he wasn’t cruising by,
cold beer in the back,
one-pump gas-station town
Friday nights

he idled at the corner
and we skipped back inside

he’d be back tomorrow

maybe then,
I’d go for a drive
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12 comments:

  1. sMay 23, 2013 at 7:07 PM

    i seriously wish my best friend and i had done this like we always said we would. so glad you wrote about this, lauren. but seriously, don't get in a stranger's car that what they always taught me. even though rules are meant to be broken sometimes.

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    1. sweetapplerumMay 23, 2013 at 7:54 PM

      i normally don't like to add on any sort of explanation, so the reader can take it where they want, but, he wasn't a stranger. i was just shy. he became my hs sweetheart once i got up the nerve to go for that ride.

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    2. sMay 24, 2013 at 11:51 AM

      i agree with you about own interpretation and letting the reader take it as they want - i was just kidding about strangers. that's actually a romantic story knowing the background.

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  2. RyanMay 23, 2013 at 10:55 PM

    I really liked that, Lauren. I, too, like the idea of being a little vague so as to leave room for imagination. You're a wonderful poet.

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  3. Optimistic ExistentialistMay 24, 2013 at 7:08 AM

    I personally like that you don't add explanation...adds more mystery to it and gives it a better feel. That's what's so beautiful about poetry in general...the subjectivity of the reader's interpretation.

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  4. LuLuMay 24, 2013 at 8:30 AM

    "the hot July moon.. saw everything
    first taste of love"

    xx
    LuLu
    Breakfast After 10

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  5. AVYMay 26, 2013 at 4:57 AM

    Those last lines bring back so many memories of us driving to nowhere, just the two of us.

    /Avy

    http://mymotherfuckedmickjagger.blogspot.com

    ♥

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  6. Purple AssassinMay 26, 2013 at 5:30 AM

    Randomness is the best part. Carefree. I feel I get stuck in that feeling forever.

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  7. Launna May 26, 2013 at 5:26 PM

    Awe, I really like this, I love those teenage years where my friends and I would hang around trying to catch a guys attention... lots of fun and good memories :)

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